CK Lynn

Hmmm... should this be in other poetry? Omnipotent, powerless Fearless and afraid. Voices calling, pushing, pulling. To and fro Surrounding. One white flower Floating on a stream A beautiful sight ...

Bare. There's nothing to suggest that this bedroom actually belongs to anyone, its so sparse. Even if it supposed to be empty, there's no trace of identity here. I liked ...

I like it, but it ended with too much spirit and "could have been" feeling and not enough essence.

Hmmm... It was different, but ended too quickly for us to know much.

The first one is really cool.

Thanks for the advice.

Thanks for the crits!

I really liked it :)

Hmmm...it's alright, but not really my style.

I LOVED the second one. The others were pretty good, too.

Waaaaay too long. The lines I had the most problems with were 3 and 7. Interesting subject, though.

I really liked it, but maybe you should add another verse?

On the first day, She avoided it, Fought it, With swords of bare-to-bone sentences, And shields of lackluster verbs. Because she hated it. On the second day, she clung to ...

*cute*

I really liked it! the only thing I could say to change would be this line: [quote="Lil_Pau"][b]Spirits of the Twilight[/b] Telling their story Through their flight It didn't flow quite ...